I sit on the school bus, listening
to the low hum of the wheels traverse over the smooth black asphalt. The bus is
empty and all is quiet as we make our way through the winding turns and
elevated streets to a high mountaintop. There is no iPhone to stimulate my preoccupied
mind. It’s too dark to do homework. I’m left alone to my thoughts. As the sun
begins to rise, the bus makes its ascent to the next stop. Silhouettes of trees
fill my vision and line the streets. We live at the base of the foothills in a
small town in Northern California. The gears of the bus downshift, continuously
pulling the weight of the big yellow automobile up the hill. I begin reflecting
on last weekend’s adventures. I see a young boy. The boy looks down at the orange and black plastics that garnish
the interior engine of his KTM and appreciation floods over him at the return
to the high desert. He’s wearing a helmet, pads, and most importantly, riding
boots. He’s got a thirst for speed, at times too much according to the boy’s
mother. Excitement flowing through the teen’s body he mounts the maniacal
machine. I smile at the memory. Oh, how I long to return to that place, across
the Sierra Nevada’s and unto the desert. The bus's brakes screech to a halt. We’ve
made it to the first stop at the top of the mountain. From here my gaze floods over
the sea of trees at the speed of light. The rolling hills slowly grow into
mountains as they reach the Sierra Nevada’s. They stand tall, proud, magnificent.
A purplish hue garnishes their majesty, and the serenity of the Holy Ghost
fills my mind at the sight of God’s creation. All I can think about is when my
beloved bike and I can be united again in our earthly chapel at Moon Rocks,
Nevada.
I like your word choice in this scene. I think what set the tone for this more than anything for me was the way you used sound. Everything seemed like the rolling mountains you were looking over at and that was really lovely.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed the first part of this. I felt as if I were there with you experiencing this. Well done.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed the description! Beautiful! However I am not completely sure what insight you gained from this experience. Is it just an appreciation for God through nature?
ReplyDeleteThere is a lot of great word combinations, both literal and figurative. "smooth black asphalt" with a school bus cannot be more nostalgic, and "earthly chapel" could not be more transcendent. So the fact that you can tap into strong descriptions definitely shows that this piece will range from good storytelling to a higher level of understanding. Also, there is little that has made Northern California more enticing than your description of the foothills.
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