I am a writer who’s clenched, but soft hands were ripped and cut by paper from an unknown fraudster. Still terrified by traumatic events, suffers their effects. A morning, brisk by the air of fall, sent the flitting legs of a runner up a mountain.The raw air touched her bare skin well.
Dark dirt and trees encompassed her on her way. Seeing the sun up ahead, she had no fear of freezing.
I needed so much time to heal and I didn’t give myself that time. Instead, I beat myself up even more and the healing didn’t happen for a long, long time because I didn’t allow myself to be imperfect and shattered. It didn’t help that I felt misunderstood by her because she just assumed that I was prideful and selfish and she would tell me. That was the easy assumption. But it went far deeper than just a pride thing. My heart was destroyed.
I really like the balance that the first passage has. There's a really good flow with the sentences, and I all of the adjectives and nouns are concrete. I could definitely put myself in your position.
ReplyDeleteYour description of each scene builds suspense of the narration. I especially loved your first description of the spider and how the event builds.
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