She is soft like an angel or maybe a bear. It depends on the day. She can definitely growl like a bear when she's angry. But mostly, she floats like an angel. Her softness is manifest in her fluffy graying hair, the gentle lines crisscrossing her face, the smallish knots beginning to form in her hands. Her body is warm and inviting, her arms holding a small child whenever one is available. Her home is cluttered, but not dirty. The dishes are always done, the floor always vacuumed, but somehow there are always toys covering the cleanliness. The old sticker-maker, the dress-up cowboy vest and hat, the Fisher Price Hospital.
At first she is uncomfortable. I can tell from the way she avoids my gaze, her dark red hair falling like a curtain over her face. I ask her more questions. Her gaze lifts to mine. She doesn't want to tell me what's going on. Her small frame shakes as she squares her jaw and says firmly, "We've separated. I'm okay though." Are you? I wonder. I can tell from her face that she wants no pity. Her eyes have hardened, as if daring me to feel sorry for her. I don't think she is okay, but I do not feel pity. All I feel is admiration. One day, she is going to conquer the world. She knows it, and I know it.
I enjoyed all of the details you used to describe your characters; they helped add personality. Something I thought you did well in the third example was the dialogue followed by thought.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoy the line, "the chill night is seeping through our window." The imagery right there is beautiful. The second one is really cute and I enjoyed the personification there. Ooo and "her read hear falling like a curtain over her face" that one gives me the chills!!
ReplyDeleteThese brief descriptions not only convey the characters you are describing but your relationships with them as well. It is clear that all of these people are meaningful to you and each one of these stories has an entire backstory that is intriguing after reading this little bit.
ReplyDeleteI think your descriptions are what make this, but looking at your first entry, the one with dialogue, I'm guessing he's your husband, provides more information about his personality than what you can say in a description. I think that might be why dialogue is important when writing and introducing characters.
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