1.
As far as revision goes, I think I am ok with
the order in which I tell my story. The main thing I noticed as I read it over
and listened to the feedback, is that I need to be more didactic in my story
telling.
2.
I want to do a better job in the imagery I use
in my paper, especially because so much of my surrounding through out the story
are in nature, I think I can do a better job at situating the reader to my surroundings.
3.
I have some pictures I have from my first hike
and the most recent hike that I want to use. I just have to think about the
order I want them to appear and what type of pictures would actually match the
theme of my essay. I want the reader to feel like the pictures are really apart
of the story.
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